alicevangeline

There's a dusting at work. It doesn't feel that cold!

I read an entire book this weekend (Still the Sun) and, ok. I would give it 3 stars. It seemed like the editing process was rushed, because of smll things like - when a character replies to another character and echoes their words to them, but uses the wrong verb tense.

That kind of thing. Not just once. I think there was one line that had "is was" in a row. And I don't think it was a writing style choice!

The reason that the rushed editing matters is a couple things:
- I kind of know & understand 'machines.' I know a flywheel from a governor, and I used to know types of gears. But I still had some trouble picturing the machines described. I guess the reader is expected to just envision it in portrait mode - a spotlight on the thing mentioned and the rest is blurry - but with how deeply the main character related to the machines I think more could be done here. Reader doesn't NEED to imagine entire machine, I guess, but I think we can do better. And there are illustrations, but not of the complex things.
- Another big thing is not exactly a plot hole but a 'wait, so HOW did that thing happen, again?' Why is this character in this situation - they explained it once, but with new context that doesn't make sense anymore.

So, with these concerns, still 3 stars! Turns out the author dreamed one of the scenes and then wrote the book from there.